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23rd-Jul-2006 10:46 pm
Just a little something I've whipped up for belovedsnail and cocombat. Hope you guys enjoy. :)

title: whirl
author: moveablehistory
pairing: sam/dean.
rating: s for schmoop + c for competition, 14a for short.
notes: 780 words, written very quickly. :)
summary: Sam and Dean come across a carnival.

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The tilt-a-whirl was going to give him a massive headache, but fuck if he cared, 'cause he had Sam plastered against his side and the lights made everything so amusing. Everything sped by so fast and he didn't have to worry about a damned thing.


"Ten bucks says you'll miss." Dean said, and he shot again, doing surprisingly well considering he was shooting one-handed, bracing the butt of the toy rifle against his hip.

Sam leaned in, let his lips brush Dean's ear.

"I say I'll make it."

"Fair enough." Dean murmured.


"Best part, dude!" Dean exclaimed. Sam shrugged and dug some change out of Dean's back pocket.

"Two, please."

The concession stand girl - this seventeen year old kid with pink hair and a lip ring - nodded slowly, and started up the machine.

Dean buried his face in the cotton candy, and when he came up for air there were bits of pink stuck to his nose and his eyebrows and the corner of his mouth. Sam bent and licked them all off.


"I dare you to eat all of these and then go on the tilt-a-whirl." Sam looked over all the pizza appraisingly, as if measuring to see how much they could collectively handle.

"What? What kind of dare is that?" Dean waved his good arm around, encompassing the whole stand and it's environs. "I've fought in all kinds of conditions - sick! puking! bleeding from the head! right after that dinner in Louisiana, remember that? Could barely stand, so fucking full... - what makes you that would slow me down?"

Sam pushed the pizza box over. "Double dare you."

"Fine!" Dean grinned. He picked up two slices, squished them together and took a huge bite.

Sam made an eww! face.

Dean shrugged, said "whaa?" around a mouthful.


The girl running the shooting range winked at them and handed over all together way too many stuffed animals.

"We don't have room for all of these!" Dean whined. He was carrying two teddy bears under each arm, and Sam had a stuffed dog the size of a small pony slung over his shoulders.

"Where are we supposed to put them?" Sam asked, "We can't just throw them out."

"Sure we can." Dean moved toward a conveniently placed can, but Sam caught his elbow.

"Hold on, you owe me. And I've got a better idea."

There was one of those Salvation Army things set up, even though Christmas was months away. A tired-looking woman in a red pantsuit was perched on a stool beside the collection bowl.

"I can't see why we can't just give these to her like normal people." Dean complained, and Sam rolled his eyes.

"Normal people? Besides, this way's hilarious."

Dean nodded. "Yeah, guess so."

They crouched behind the tilt-a-whirl operator's stand, grinning like little kids. Sam counted down wordlessly, two one...

They sprinted towards the woman, cutting through people and packs of little kids, getting close enough to throw all the toys at the base of the woman's stool, she shrieked and then she giggled.

Sam and Dean ran past her and ducked behind a cotton candy stand. "That was so much more fun than it should have been." Dean wheezed.

"Yeah," Sam said, "and you still owe me."


"Wanna get some pizza?" Sam asked casually, and Dean grinned.



"Two tickets." The carousel operator said lazily, and Dean shoved his good hand into his back pockets, digging out the crumped tickets he'd found on the floor.

It was one of those pseudo-antique deals, spinning around slowly. "You don't actually expect me to ride that?" Sam joked, and Dean shook his head; laughed.

"Nah," he shot Sam a sideways look, "c'mon."

They moved to the centre. Safety mirrors lined the middle and Dean leaned against it instead of hanging on to one of the horses or in a carriage or whatever. He planted his feet shoulder-width apart, and Sam stepped in easily, bumping his hips against Dean's, tugging on one of his beltloops lightly. Popcorn crunched beneath them, leaving little smears on the iron flooring.

Dean wiggled his arm in its sling. "How much longer?" Dean asked quietly, and Sam shrugged.

"What does it feel like to you?"

Dean flexed his fingers. "Maybe another week?"

"Yeah, okay, one more week."

Dean smiled and Sam could barely see it - the lights strung around the carousel were dimmed and it was so dark already - but he could feel it.


Dean shifted on the bed, moving enough to shrug Sam's arm off from over his belly. The cast was itchy; Dean wordlessly draped it over towards Sam, and Sam scratched underneath, as far as he could go.

"We should go somewhere." Sam said easily. Dean stretched out as far as he could, elbowed Sam in the ribs. Sam laughed, ruffled Dean's hair.

"I saw a carnival off the interstate," Dean yawned, "haven't done that in ages."

"Okay," Sam said, "let's go."
24th-Jul-2006 04:20 am (UTC)
Everything sped by so fast and he didn't have to worry about a damned thing.

This was gorgeous. I love that the end was the beginning, and that everything was just so vibrant.
24th-Jul-2006 05:25 am (UTC)
Eee. :) I haven't tried something with a funky timeline in a while, and I used to do it all the time - ergo, kind of nervous but yay. :D

Thanks. ♥ I was aiming for vibrant, and I'm glad that came across. :)
24th-Jul-2006 04:58 am (UTC)
Oh, sweet as cotton candy itself, and so tasty. Lovely!!!
24th-Jul-2006 05:24 am (UTC)
Thank you. ♥
24th-Jul-2006 05:40 am (UTC)
I didn't know I needed this until I read it and then I thought, how could I have survived this long without reading about Sam and Dean at the carnival. It's sweet and fluffy and surprisingly hot and I love it.

Sam pushed the pizza box over. "Double dare you."

"Fine!" Dean grinned. He picked up two slices, squished them together and took a huge bite.

Sam made an eww! face.

Dean shrugged, said "whaa?" around a mouthful.

Best scene EVER. Although Sam licking cotton candy off Dean is a close second. Actually, scratch that, I think it's a tie.

I really liked the timeline tango cause I didn't actually realize it was going on until Sam asked Dean if he wanted pizza and then I had one of those lightbulb moments. Lightbulb moments are fun.
24th-Jul-2006 05:55 am (UTC)
Whoa, thanks. :D

I tried to make it porny, but they wouldn't cooperate AND my mom was hovering. :/ - so I'm glad it still came across as kind of hot. :D!

Also, licking cotton candy off Dean? Mmmmmmm!

And I'm glad the timeline worked okay. :) I used to write a lot of wonky timelines - weird contexts, etc - but I hadn't tried it in a while, so I was nervous. Glad it worked. ;D

24th-Jul-2006 01:20 pm (UTC)

See this? This is me filled with *glee*!

This - yes! Just how I picture them, and oh, thank you so much for writing this for me.

I liked Dean's smack-talking with the pizza eating, and the why of their 'time off'. And they're really sweet.

*squeezes extra enjoyment in around the glee!*
24th-Jul-2006 03:15 pm (UTC)
After I posted it, I was all oh noes i forgot the hot dogs! so just imagine there's a scene where Sam's eating one and Dean's leering, okay? :D

And thanks so much. :D I tried to come with a reasonable reason why Dean and Sam would stay in one place and/or even notice there was a carnival, without hurting Dean too much. :)

thank you!!! ♥
24th-Jul-2006 03:42 pm (UTC)
Two of my all time favorite things are, 1) the boys in a stable, accepted, casually affectionate relationship, and 2) the boys doing something fun and not related to hunting. So this was like EEEEEEHAPPY for me. They're so sweet and comfortable with each other, I LOVE it! Plus, snarky! And silly! Adorable piece :D
24th-Jul-2006 03:49 pm (UTC)
Dude, those are a couple of my favourite things too. :D

So happy you like it. And yay for snarky and silly! ♥
24th-Jul-2006 04:09 pm (UTC)
Mmm. I liked this, with the 'moments' together at the carnival captured as snapshots. Sweet and snark- I believe the carousel was my favorite- the tickets found, not purchased, how they stood in the shadow, hip into hips. Especially enjoyed the end, which told us everything about what we'd just read. :)
24th-Jul-2006 04:33 pm (UTC)
The carousel was my favourite too, and I hadn't noticed that I wrote them finding-not-buying tickets but of course that makes sense. :)

Thanks. ♥
24th-Jul-2006 04:38 pm (UTC)
So much fun and mirth! You managed to convey such a colourful atmosphere in a quite short space. It took me a while to get the catch of the fic but that's because I'm a bit dense. :D What an enjoyable read!
24th-Jul-2006 05:12 pm (UTC)
Haha, thanks! I like trying to pack a whole lot into a low word count, and I'm so happy it came across that way.

thanks ever so much. ♥
24th-Jul-2006 04:51 pm (UTC)
24th-Jul-2006 05:09 pm (UTC)
Thanks! ♥
24th-Jul-2006 05:12 pm (UTC)
dean covered in bits of cotton candy is possibly my favorite image. SO CUTE. he's really five, he just LOOKS like an adult. :D the whole thing is really sweet, tho, fun and brotherly and they can't spend all their time hunting and killing.... and i like how subtle dean's cast is, and the whole reason for them to be taking some r&r in the first place.
24th-Jul-2006 05:31 pm (UTC)
I know! *dead from cute*

And thanks. :D I figure that they've got to hurt themselves sometimes - this whole magical-winchester-healing-properties thing is kind of bizarre. :)

thanks so much. ♥
24th-Jul-2006 05:14 pm (UTC)
so adorable!!! loved the cotton candy scene, just made me go eeeeee!
lovely writing, as always. :)
24th-Jul-2006 05:31 pm (UTC)
you're so cute, kid. ♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥
24th-Jul-2006 05:35 pm (UTC)
That was wonderful! Vivid and cute (in a really good way)...and it just made me very, very happy. Thank you. :) *adds to memories*
24th-Jul-2006 05:41 pm (UTC)
I like making people happy. *satisfied* :D

Thanks so much. ♥
24th-Jul-2006 06:41 pm (UTC)
That gave me a big huge smile and a warm fuzzy feeling all over. They so deserve happy moments like this. Lovely. Especially the cotton candy. *g*
24th-Jul-2006 07:04 pm (UTC)
They so deserve happy moments like this

Yes they do, so very much. Thanks ♥!!!
25th-Jul-2006 02:21 am (UTC)
Oh, man! The tilt-a-hurl!!! Most deceptive and EVIL ride in the history of EVERYTHING.

I loved every bite of this. Thank you!
25th-Jul-2006 04:21 am (UTC)
I KNOW. I love it - so hilarious and so awesome and mmm.

And thank you!
25th-Jul-2006 03:14 am (UTC)
first, the ever-present paragraph where i try to describe how much i liked this by saying something like "so it was this awful, busy day at work and i did such a hasty first read of this that i was totally jaw-dropping WAIT A SECOND, I GET IT! HOW NEAT! blindsided by the backwards-timeline, and all day as i was stuffing envelopes and my boss was all 'maybe you could try sealing them this way instead' and i was wishing really hard for a job that involved demon-hunting instead (destroy evil! be your own boss!), every so often i'd remember this fic and fidget and bite the insides of my lips trying not to grin and oh my god, when is there going to be a carnival in town?!"

a carnival at night, all the lights and cheerful, enchanting cheesiness, is such a fantabulous setting. and ♥, oh man, right from the beginning. having someone you like touching all squished up against you on a carnival ride is, well, one of my favourite sense-memories, and i'm glad i can share it with Dean here. there's something so just flat-out glorious about the feeling of abandon in that first paragraph.

i love all the very different moods that you managed to evoke here---there's the dizzy, spinning lights glee of the first bit, and then the sideways, sly flirting and adorable competition of the next, with the target shooting. and the cotton candy!! (it gives me an extra giggle that you've sort of described one of my very favourite people from high school as the cotton candy stand girl.) this is as good a time as any to say that i love the backward-timeline, even if it took me a while to catch on. once i figured it out, i was so excited to go read it backwards and then forwards again. you're always doing such interesting things with narrative structure and POV and eventually, your writing is going to negate my college-fiction-workshop-cringe-reflex about stories with more experiemental aspects to them. :))

and i'm so, so enamoured of the carousel segment. on one hand, it's so understatedly sexy...this kind of furtive snuggle in a semi-forbidden, semi-dreamlike setting. but i think what i like best is the dialogue, and what it (when combined with their physical easiness and affection) says about their intimacy with each other and about the strangeness of their lives and how familiar they are with how things work inside that. (...i don't know that i can even explain exactly how i got that out of those few lines, but i did, and i love it. i really will never stop being impressed with how well you do this lots-of-meaning-in-not-much-text thing. i---clearly, look at how long it takes me to say "this is such a pretty story!"---will never master this.)

the images here are so beautiful and vivid, and somehow the fic as a whole is so comforting and relaxing, which probably owes a lot to the quiet, sweet note you ended it on. the urge to do some soundtrack-compiling about this is lurking in my brain, but i'm not exactly sure what kind of music it demands yet. possibly "music about multi-coloured lights and monday suddenly being made tolerable by good writing."
25th-Jul-2006 04:01 am (UTC)
Whee!!! I just have to say I have so very much love for your icon. ♥
25th-Jul-2006 04:00 am (UTC)
Wow!! That was so sweet and honest and one beautiful visual the entire way through. I loved the ease they shared. And the stuffed animal thing? SO DARN CUTE!
25th-Jul-2006 04:39 am (UTC)
Hehehe, thanks so much. It was awesomefun for me to write, and I'm glad it came through. :D
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