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Beside the Machinery, This 
15th-Apr-2006 06:59 pm
title: Beside the Machinery, This
rating: PG, Hard 14A if you have quite the imagination.
disclaimer: This is a derivative work and no profit is being made.
notes: Spoilers for the pilot and Bugs, but only a little. Slashy/Wincest companion piece/sequel to Deus Ex Machina. Special thanks to elle_dritch for betaing - thanks muchissimo. Suggested reading format includes downloading Led Zeppelin - The Rain Song and loading it up on the player of your choice, reading the lyrics if you want an extra dose of schmoop, and then reading this. :)
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Beside the Machinery, This

The car knows it's a big car. It kind of figures this is a good thing, because sometimes the dean part and the sam (it heard sammy most times, though) part stay with it instead of going to park in the 'motel' – usually if the dean part didn't 'hustle' but the car isn't sure what 'hustle' means. It thinks it sounds kind of like an radiator part, or an attachment or maybe it was one of the special repairs it didn't get very often. Sometimes the sam (sammy?) part has to stick its lower pieces out of a rolled down window to fit properly across the backseat before it turns its motor pieces off and makes that 'rrrrr' sound that usually meant the sam (sammy?) part was idling.

The car notices neither part actually ever turns off its ignition. It wonders what the fuel consumption rate is like for those two.

The car hasn't ever actually seen anything, or tasted anything, or smelled anything. It doesn't know that there are things it could crash into on the side of the road. It doesn't have the proper modifications. The car doesn't know that it's missing anything, and so it thinks that the dean part is an unusually warm engine type thing that steers, and that the sam (sammy?) part is also an unusually warm engine type thing that also steers. At first the car thinks that the sam (sammy?) part is a spare, but then the car realises that it does different things like 'make puppy dog eyes' or 'research information', and so the car decides the sam (sammy?) part is a different model of the same kind.

The car can hear things, because that's how it woke up, and it can feel things because of course everything feels things. The car doesn't think that is unusual at all.

The car doesn't understand about seasons passing. It doesn't know, for example, how long it went without a sam (sammy?) part and it doesn't know how long the john part's been gone. It thinks it might remember the sound of water hitting something called 'ocean', but the car doesn't recall if that was before or after the second to last oil change, or if it ever happened at all. Time is irrelevant, really – only mileage counts.

It knows that there is a thunderstorm out there somewhere right now. It can feel drops on its metal sheeting, feel dirt and dust sliding off a little bit, but it's not sure if the storm already happened and the drops haven't dried yet or if the water was still falling right now. It notices itself slowing down, and a shifting of the dean part and the sam (sammy?) part across the seats. It hears words like goddamn it's cold and get over here then, but it's not sure what those words mean, exactly. It feels the dean part and the sam part fit together, and it thinks that the missing pieces must have gotten shipped in from somewhere, although the car can't recall the usual clinking sounds of installation.

It notices the parts idling for a long, long time, saying words loudly and quietly that the car doesn't understand, shifting and aligning; then the car feels something like engines overheating and steaming or maybe revolutions per minute going up slowly and probably redlining because something must have blown and everything went quiet. The car doesn't remember feeling that before or the deansam part doing that before, and it's not sure if that was a good thing or a bad thing, but it was different and important and it didn't seem like anything was broken but fixed instead. The car only thinks about it a little bit more and doesn't worry.

The car doesn't know what the sun is. It can feel sunlight though, sort of, and it knows that most of the driving (the car decides drivening didn't sound as right) is done when it's warm-like out. It feels the parts in the backseat shifting and aligning, and hears words like you okay? and going anywhere? and stay close it's cold and hell never. It feels the deansam part move around until everything settles into place the way it's supposed to; the way it's built.

It hears music again, words strung together like gears saying things like I've felt the coldness of my winter, I never thought it would ever go ...

It isn't very pretty, the car thinks, but it's kind of beautiful.

20th-Apr-2006 05:17 am (UTC)
Ooooh. Very different and very pretty. I wish I had more to say. I really, really like this.
20th-Apr-2006 02:25 pm (UTC)
Thanks - I'm glad you like it. ♥
20th-Apr-2006 05:28 am (UTC)
There are no words for how much I'm loving the Metallicar. It's so... everything's just so...simple, when it's viewed through the eyes (headlights?) of the Metallicar. Things are broken, but then it gets fixed. Doesn't matter how it got fixed, only that it did. The car strips away all the nonessentials, like wrong and incest and brothers don't and Dad and Jess, and it's just the sam and dean parts, finally, finally fitting together and running in what surely must be the factory approved manner.

*sighs* You and the Metallicar OWN me. The wonderings about fuel consumption and the idling, and the car's version of sex are exquisite... and you know what? This line also OWNS me. Time is irrelevant, really – only mileage counts. Because... oh God, so true.
20th-Apr-2006 02:29 pm (UTC)
I really like that too - how everything is necessarily stripped away because the of the car's innocence/naivety, and it just assumes that it's the way it's supposed to be. Y'know, like a little kid that's totally cool with two guys kissing because the kid hasn't been brainwashed into thinking it's weird.

Heee, factory approved. :)

Thanks so much for following this ficverse - I'm really happy you like it. :)
20th-Apr-2006 07:05 am (UTC)
The snoring = idling part made me smile... the whole thing is just wonderfully unusual and smart and good.
20th-Apr-2006 02:30 pm (UTC)
Hehehe, thanks. :) I was trying to imagine what a car would consider sleeping to be like, and then I heard my dad three rooms over and it came to me, LOL. :)

Thanks. ♥
20th-Apr-2006 08:58 am (UTC)
I've been eagerly waiting for another part of this story^_^ It's a lot of fun reading and trying to understand what the car is seeing/sensing and how it relates everything to machinery and mechanical parts. Half the fun is in its metaphors.

I hope you'll write more in this story's world.
20th-Apr-2006 02:33 pm (UTC)
Yay for eagerly waiting. &smishes;

I'm a big car freak, LOL, and so when I talk about parts or pieces or when I use metaphors, I really mean it. I'm glad you're paying attention. :)

I want to write more in the world, too. :)

20th-Apr-2006 09:39 am (UTC)
I love this car
20th-Apr-2006 02:33 pm (UTC)
Me too. :)
20th-Apr-2006 10:46 am (UTC)

This fic could have sucked. I mean, really sucked, in a fundamentally AWFUL way. But instead it's one of the best things I've read in awhile. You just--you nailed it. And I absolutely love the ending.
20th-Apr-2006 02:37 pm (UTC)
Heh, sweet.

I've got to admit that I read "suck" and the first thing I thought was "oh jesus no!" and then I read the rest of your comment and now I'm grinning like a FOOL. :)

Glad you like it. ♥
20th-Apr-2006 12:38 pm (UTC)
Time is irrelevant, really – only mileage counts.

Great line. Fantastic story. God, I love that car.
20th-Apr-2006 02:39 pm (UTC)
Thanks, thanks, and so do I. :)

ps., your icon makes me laugh and then question my salvation, LOL.

20th-Apr-2006 01:34 pm (UTC)
This was totally cool. Wonderful, and of course their car would come to life.
20th-Apr-2006 02:41 pm (UTC)
Hehe, yay. I'm glad you like it and you're right - of course it'll come to life. We might not see it, but I bet it totally is. :)
20th-Apr-2006 03:49 pm (UTC)
The car doesn't understand about seasons passing. It doesn't know, for example, how long it went without a sam (sammy?) part and it doesn't know how long the john part's been gone. It thinks it might remember the sound of water hitting something called 'ocean', but the car doesn't recall if that was before or after the second to last oil change, or if it ever happened at all. Time is irrelevant, really – only mileage counts.

Beautiful, beautiful passage. Metallicar philosophy, and time and the Here and Now of mechanic and parts.
Your Metallicar voice is truly unique :)
20th-Apr-2006 06:37 pm (UTC)
I didn't think of it as a Metallicar!philosophy, but yeah. I like. :)

Thanks. ♥
20th-Apr-2006 06:53 pm (UTC)
This is one of the most original fics I've read in any fandom. Wonderful perspective on the dean and sam (sammy?) parts and seeing from the view of a car. Great great job.
20th-Apr-2006 10:20 pm (UTC)
Yes! Originality! *twirls!*

Thanks. :)
20th-Apr-2006 06:56 pm (UTC)
Oh I love this..... great story...
20th-Apr-2006 10:20 pm (UTC)
You're welcome. ;)
20th-Apr-2006 07:47 pm (UTC)
Oooh, marishna linked me last night, but I'm glad I saved this for being actually awake. I love it, so much. *memories*
20th-Apr-2006 10:21 pm (UTC)
Hehehe, icon love.

I love knowing when I get linked, yay. I'm glad you like it. :D
20th-Apr-2006 08:22 pm (UTC)
Oh, wow! This is so incredibly cool! Very original!
20th-Apr-2006 10:21 pm (UTC)
Thanks! :D
21st-Apr-2006 02:17 am (UTC)

::smooshes Metallicar::
22nd-Apr-2006 03:41 am (UTC)
*also &smishes; metallicar*

21st-Apr-2006 07:05 pm (UTC)
If you don't know by now how much I love your Metallicar fics, then I frankly suck as a communicator. Because I love them like I love chocolate Swiss Roll. Which is so much.

The voice of the car is just perfect. Seeing the Sam/Dean relationship from the viewpoint of one of the few constants in their lives is inspired and creative and beautifully judged and original and masterfully written and other really good stuff.

I didn't really have to suggest anything to improve this fic because you are just that damn good. *Drifts off into dreams of backseat Sam/Dean redlining*
22nd-Apr-2006 03:39 am (UTC)
Haaa! :)

I am presently grinning THIS BIG all over the place. :)

I was worried about the car's voice for a while, but I'm really, really, really happy with it. Heeee.

Plus, I also like contemplative Sam/Dean redlining. ;)
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